Wednesday, April 2, 2014

Show not tell setting

My teeth start chattering “I'm bundled up in 3 blankets and I'm still freezing!” I say repeatedly. . I hear the wind howling, soaring and crickets outside suddenly a big gust of wind sends my curtain up touching my ceiling revealing the bright moon. “UGH my window's open, I'm too cold and too lazy to handle this.” My body feels stiff , it feels like its going to break.

1 comment:

  1. Mya you have done a wonderful job of describing how cold this feels. While I was reading this I could feel, hear, and see exactly what you were describing. You have an excellent feel for what to write to describe what is going on around you. I hope you continue on this path and I look forward to reading more of your posts.